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The Sack Girls Belly 5


It had been a week since Ellen the Sack Girl had travelled to Japan for her previous vore meal. Back then, she had devoured a pre-teen girl but was attacked by someone who was apparently her older brother and happened to be one with the XERO, among the few beings who could see her against her will alongside her colleagues and superiors. If it hadn't been for her massive belly back then, she probably could've fought that boy, although there was know way to tell what the outcome would've been. Those with XERO each have different base powers, a teleportation ability identicle to the type the Sack Girls have as well as the ability to see Sack Girls.


The two groups had been enemies for ages. While Sack Girls were behind the legends of the 'Sack Man', those with the XERO were behind legends like ghosts and shapeshifters. It was a good thing that their intel couldn't find the Sack Girls headquarters or there would be problems.


It was around 7:00pm on a Friday evening and Ellen was looking over the world map which had marked all the countries in which a Sack Girl had eaten since the beginnign of the contest to see who could eat a misbehaving kid from each country and have the most at the end. Ellen now had two pins over the U.S and Japan while  multiple other countries like were already taken. As she looked over the map, she noticed one nation next to one of her pins which could be her next conquered spot. Korea. "Okay baby, let's go!" She said as she jumped into the air and teleported.


Within a moment, she was seated in front of a beach where various women were running around in swimwear. Any type one could imagine, it was there. Ellen was getting quite anxious to start eating after seeing all the delicious women in revealing outfits, showing ridiculous amounts of flesh. Some sat purched on rocks, or in the sand and some even swam around in the water while the boys at the beach sat around and slept. It had to be early in the morning given the darkness at the beach and the people were using flashlights and such. Ellen watched from afar in the bushes where nobody could see her while she decided who to eat.


"Ellen?" A voice asked from behind. She turned around to see a beautiful girl with long brown hair looking at her. It was Hyun-Ju, another Sack Girl who just happened to be participating in the game. "What are you doing here, Hyun-Ju?" Ellen asked. "I live here." She laughed. "What's your excuse?" "I'm uh..." Ellen didn't know what to say since she was trying to do since Hyun-Ju might beat her to it. "Are you trying to eat someone?" SHe asked. Ellen was a bit surprised that she brought that up. "How did you know?" Ellen asked. "It's late, they're like our age, you must be here for the contest you started." Hyun-Ju said. "Yeah, I am." Ellen admitted. "Well don't worry, I'm not interested in the contest." "You're not?" "No, I eat because it makes me feel good having a huge belly with a boy inside. If I were interested, I'd have my marker here" She said. "Yeah, I like that too." Ellen agreed.


"And I just can't believe we ain't together!" The voice came from the the radio. "Man, I hate that song!" Ellen complained. "Hehe, me too." Hyun-Ju agreed. Eventually, the boys went back inside their cabins to sleep in their own beds but the girls kept playing around on the beach in their swimwear which would soon allow Ellen and Hyun-Ju to make their move. After waiting for an hour, the Sack Girls got their chance when one of the girls walked off into the woods alone. Hyun-Ju translated something she said as going looking for a ball thrown in. The two of them followed here from behind, careful to hide behind trees if they were to be found on since if they were going to eat her, they would have to be away from the others.


Soon after, about 200 yards away from the other people, the Sack Girls had followed the girl to a secluded field where stationary weaponry was around the edges, recreating an ancient battlefield. The girl they were going after found her ball in the middle of a field, picked it up and began walking back to her friends. She tossed around the ball from hand to hand, smiling and reminiscing at the time she'd had with her friends. As she walked into the forest, Ellen and Hyun-Ju had already hidden themselves, waiting for an opportune moment to strike. While the girl was walking, Ellen took a twig in her hand and snapped it, making it seem like someone else what there. The girl gasped once and looked around, pointing her flashlight in every direction. When her back was turned, Ellen came out of the shadows and made a move.


As the girl turned back, she saw Ellen coming up to her with a happy look on her face. She thought the blonde beauty was just going to pass her by or ask her a question but suddenly, she felt pressure pulling her back. Hyun-Ju was restraining her and pulling her down while Ellen came up and opened her mouth wide. The girl let out a scream as Ellen clamped her head with her mouth and grabbed her sides, pushing her into her mouth as Hyun-Ju let go to see the spectacle. Bit by bit, Ellen pushed her in, holding on to her smooth abs and body curves. Within a minute, she was down to her waste which she ate with extreme pleasure. This girl was going down much quicker than Ellen's last two victims, John and some unnamed pre-teen girl.


Hyun-Ju watched in excitement as Ellen swallowed her victim more and more. Before long, her stomach had already blown out as all that was left to go down was the girls feet. "Let me help." Hyun-Ju said as she removed the girls sandals, knowing that they wouldn't feel good going down. The girls feet could be seen going down Ellen's throat as she flailed wildyly, creating portrusions in the throat. With one gulp, the girl landed in Ellen's belly which swelled up several feet. The rough forest ground made it difficult to stand with the huge belly so Ellen sat down and her fellow Sack Girl sat down with her. "Well, this'll teach her not to stay out at the beach all night." Ellen smiled, happily rubbing her swollen belly. "Well, it may not have taught her but she'll never do it again." Hyun-Ju said, patting Ellen's belly. Ellen started laughing at this. "Because she can't." At that, Ellen's belly began to portrude like rubber in separate places. "She's trying to get out." Hyun-Ju said. "Yeah? Keep trying!" Ellen shouted as she stood up and smacked one of the portrusions. This would prove to be a bad move.


"Aaaa..." Ellen screamed as she was knocked off balance by her own hit and began rolling down the hill. Her big belly made it look like she was some kind of giant ball, the rolling down the hill as a giant ball looked like something out of a movie. "Wait up!" Hyun-Ju exclaimed as she ran after the big bouncing belly girl. Ellen probably would've stopped soon if she were at her normal size but her massive belly made her keep bouncing around. After a minute she was out of the forest and bouncing towards the beach. Fortunately for her, she hit a tree which stopped her in her tracks. Hyun-Ju ran over to see if she was alright.


"I'm fine." Ellen said as she saw Hyun-Ju approach. "That was crazy, you must've rolled a half a kilometre." Hyun-Ju said amazed. "I bet I did but I'm alright." Ellen said as she accepted Hyun-Ju's help getting back up. "Good thing." Ellen looked around "So...I'm going back to the headquarters" she said. "Alriiiiii" Hyun-Ju screamed as she was somehow lifted far above into the air. "What is this!?" Ellen shouted, turning around as she saw two figures approaching her. As they got closer, it was clear that one of them was a tall blonde caucasian boy in a hooded sweater and jeans and another, slightly shorter, Korean boy in a jean jacket and cargo pants. The one in the cargo pants was holding his hand like a claw similar to Darth Vader's force choke and holding up Hyun-Ju in the air. Ellen knew immedaitely what these two were.


"You ate my girlfriend, 'Sack Girl'." The one in cargo pants said. "Let her go or your friend will pay." "Man, don't you XERO guys have anything else to do but hunt for sexy women?" Ellen asked, playing around with her hair, trying to see if it would make them calm. "Nothing sexy about you." The tall blonde said. "Now let the girl go." With that, the blonde guy's body, starting with his hands, began to glow yellow. For some reason, this put a great deal of pressure on Ellen and Hyun-Ju. It would've made both of them drop to the ground but Hyun-Ju was suspended in the air by the other boy while Ellen was resisting as best she could. "Well?" The guy in cargo pants asked. "Ellen, get out of here!" Hyun-Ju urged her. "What about you?" She asked. "Forget me." Hyun-Ju told her. "Hear that, Volt?" The cargo pants boy asked. "She's gonna abandon her buddy." "That's sad, even by your standard, Sack Girl." The blonde, identified as Volt, stated. "Damn it alright, now let her go!" Ellen shouted. Volt lowered his energy gravitation to allow his friend to put down Hyun-Ju without crushing her.


The boys laughed at one another and set Hyun-Ju down on the ground. Ellen ran over to her to see if she were okay before she looked back at the boy. "Well?" Volt asked. "You're gonna pay." Ellen said before she grabbed Hyun-Ju's hands and placed them on her huge belly and smiled. Without another second wasted, the two of them disappeared, leaving the two boys with the XERO looking on. "That was very poorly handled." Volt said. "I know." His partner responded. "What about the decoy?" Volt asked. "I'll tell them the truth, they won't do anything to one of their own." He answered. "It's a shame those two are Sack Girls. That blonde girl really was pretty cute." Volt said. "Both of them were." The other guy said.


When Hyun-Ju awoke, she saw herself in a rom unfamilliar to her. It was quite dark and looked to be the room of a teenage boy judging by the material on the wall. "Well, good to know you're alright." A voice said. Hyun-Ju looked over to see Ellen standing up, leaning on the wall. Her belly was as huge as it was after she'd eaten that girl and so nt much time could've passed. "We're in the room of a boy named John." Ellen said. "John?" Hyun-Ju asked. "Well...that was his name." Ellen said, stroking her belly to give Hyun-Ju an understanding of what she meant. "You ate him?" She asked. "Yeah, I started the contest with him." Ellen said. "So you kept that girl in your belly?" "Yeah, I tricked the guys into putting you down first and took you out of there." Ellen explained. "Nobody seems to know that John kid I ate was missing since this room is exactly how I left it." "Good thing." Hyun-Ju said.


It was late in the night so Ellen left Hyun-Ju to rest in John's former bedroom. She returned to the Sack Girls Headquarters to check out the world map and saw that she now had her marker over three countries. SHe was currently ahead of the rest of the Sack Girl, most of whom only had one country and one who had two. "I love this job." She said as she rubbed her huge belly.
The long delayed 5th chapter of the Sack Girl series.

The first Sack Girl introduced, Ellen, gets help from another Sack Girl to mark another country and get ahead in the game.

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mocpages123 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student
i dont understand what the girl did wrong... can they eat anyone, even people who dont do anything?

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J4B Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Interesting. I do enjoy reading these.

Got two nitpickings:

First paragraph
"although there was know way to tell "
although there was no way to tell


eigth paragraph:
"she was down to her waste which she ate with"
she was down to her waist which she ate with
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
Well, unfortunately, notepad does not offer an instant correction option like MS Word does. Even with one, nobody is perfect.
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J4B Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I am just saying so you know. No need to excuse yourself. Everyone does these kind of mistakes.
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
Alright, cool.
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AndaliteXD Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I assume this is in North Korea?
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
It's wherever in Korea the reader wants it to be.
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AndaliteXD Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Uh... Okay, but do you know about the two Koreas? It's not wherever, it's wich country. North Korea (owned by the US and the ppl arent crazeh) and South Korea. (the people are half dead and they're leaded by a tyrant)

So... It kinda matters.
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
The main concern I had with writing this series about traveling the world is that I was afraid of being called a racist. That's why I either made up the names of cities (with one mistake) or did not name a city. With the Korean peninsula, I didn't want to list a specific place so I just used 'Korea'.
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AndaliteXD Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well... Idk, it's a touchy subject.
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
Precisely.
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
I do not mean to criticize, for I'm a fellow voraphile such as yourself and understand the urge, but if I may intrude on a certain moralistic value here, summing up the Ellen's justification that her Korean victim deserved her fate because she "stayed out at the beach all night" seems weak at best. Having Ellen sum up her reasons in such a weak manner really puts it to question whether or not Sack Girls such as herself truly only eat people because they've "misbehaved" or if that's an age long excuse they use to justify to others and themselves their actions.

If you really mean for Ellen to be a good intentioned if murderous protagonist, then for future reference you may want her victims to have committed larger and grander crimes than simply staying up late at night. Otherwise she'll come off as hypocrite for judging such small offenses with the punishment of death by digestion.

Not meaning to sound hating here, but that's just my take on it.
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011
Nah man, don't worry I like constructive criticism and you're smart to point that out but I have something to say too.

If you're familiar with the legend of the 'Sack Man' then you will understand why the girls do what they do. The 'Sack Man' is folklore told to kids to make them go to bed on time and that if they do no go to bed on time, then an ugly man will take them away in a sack. The following punishment, if any, varies by culture.

So that's why Ellen's reasons for eating her victims are quite weak since the 'Sack Girls' of this series are behind the legend of the 'Sack Man' to hide the fact that it is a woman doing these things.

I doubt any parent, as the stories of legend imply, would give their children to a bad man forever for just misbehaving just as I'm sure nobody in real life would (probably) but mythology has little in common with today's morals.

So I hope this explains what I meant.
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
That makes sense. There were times before modern culture where parents didn't care too much for the mental health of their kids, and simply wanted them to be quiet and obedient. The "Sack Man' was simply another boogie man to frighten kids into line and make them behave like the little brats they were.

That, and since kids were usually considered to be more like little adults rather than human beings whose minds are still developing and can't entirely mentally and emotionally conform to the various rules of society, they were expected to take on roles they weren't fully capable of handling.

Still, you'd think by now in modern culture that the Sack Girl's species would recognize that not many people still believe in them. Sure, there's still the monster in the closest and under the bed and those shadows in the corner of the room that are darker than they should be and all the little horrors that kids invent for themselves, making their world all the more terrifying place, but surely they'd recognize that without too many human adults to morally support their behavior anymore, that its simply them, a seperate race, judging humans for committing antique crimes which are no longer considered as unpleasent as they once were.

Now instead of being the consesus and the tools to carry out the punishment, they're the phantoms who take away people's children without apparent reason. They need to change with the times if they intend to survive as a race, or remain in the moralistic right. Others, they're just another monster from the human race's past which we shall have to end. We made our monsters, now we must slay them. Another harsh reality in life but true.
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011
You're totally right man.

For the record, I wrote out the Sack Girls as being invisible to anyone who they don't want to see them, exceptions being other Sack Girls, their superiors and the ones with the XERO.

Actually, I never planned for this to turn into a series. I just wanted the first story to be a one shot but I started liking the character Ellen and made more like her and evolved the vore into a game.

I like your take on survival and morals, though.
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
That's kinda unfair. Who are their "superiors" anyway, or is that supposed to be a secret for the moment?

Oh yes, that's another point I'd like to take up: turning their out-dated jobs as a "game" of seeing who can eat the most "misbehaving" humans first seems to be the greatest perversion of their responsabilities of all. Its one thing to do a job this unpleasent but its something else entirely when people treat it as if was fun and to enjoy it. A butcher doesn't cut up animal meat because he enjoys the suffering of the animals; he simly does it because its necessary so that he and others may consume the animals for further survival.
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011
Yeah, it's a secret but it will be revealed later so keep reading :)

Well, I don't know about that. I'm sure there are people who joined meat plants for the sole purpose of being allowed to use heavy machinery on dead animals. May sound messed up but I wouldn't find it surprising.
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
That is true, people probably have done that in the past. But for the sake of professionalism, they shouldn't have done that.
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theman2222 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011
Well even so, it's difficult, if not impossible to prove intent in those cases so we have to let them go, regardless of perception.
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